by bradley_stoke
...of unabashed teen sucking and fucking, complete with nakedness, oral sex up the wazoo, lesbian encounters, shredded maiden heads, and enough fucking from some poor (very fortunate) brother/boyfriend to last him a month...well, at least through the night! God, but I love it! Your word smithing and plot are terrific. What televison show? Didn't even hear it! Thanks! Jim
Just a comment on the person who objected to the MTV: The breaks in between all of the action were intentional. It's a style of writing. It's metaphoric. Not all erotica has to be SEXSEXSEXEND.
Now, a comment on the submission, if you will: This was a great piece of writing; matured writing with naive characters. The child at the end was perfect. The pace and 60's-with-technology feel were showing of a true writer. Having read this after suffering three paragraphs of a submission that the author was probably jerking off while writing, I am impressed. I don't view it, in retrospect, as a piece of erotica so much as a piece of true writing.
Well done.
I thought your story was great! Much better than most, and definitely worth the read. Thanks for writing!
This was a great story but the comments about MTV and the bands playing broke up the action. It was like having a comercial break after each paragraph. Otherwise a great story.
btw, when does you mean when she used plaster?