All Comments on 'The Housekeeper'

I enjoyed this, would like to read a sequel.

This cries out for a continuation...

The plural of tit is tits. It is not tit's. Grammatical and spelling errors like this are really off-putting.

I wanted to really like this but your use of 3-4 different names for vagina in the same paragraphs at times was off putting. You also switched from first person to third for a section too. Proof reading may help you too.

and didn't mind the mistakes also would like to read a chapter 02

What a truly erotic story.

The grammar didn't spoil it for me...amazingly I was able to just fuzz over that.

Absolutely brilliant exciting story

XXX

All I have to say is fiddle sticks to the grammer police I thought the story was fantastic when reading the story just overlook the little mistakes I make them regularly

My fault is because I have a brain injury

So people are commenting on little mistakes but dont know if there is a problem with the author

But all I have to say well done a very erotic story thank you

the grammar cops are at it again. Has anyone noticed that the majority of grammar cops are Anonymous? Good story regardless.

Fantastic story, I absolutely loved it and could not stop reading. every new page had something to excite me. I would love to read more chapters of what life was like for them at home. Do any of the women get knocked up? Making babies is what would meld them all into a wonderful family.

I loved the story. Tremendous job.

But this was my first exposure to the British use of the word 'fanny'. For me, I found it to be a distraction. But it kept leading me to think about Anal and how exciting that would be to see Alex share that with all 3 women, and possibly some pegging too.

the switching between first and third person perspective at the end broke my immersion. i saw you doing something like this in another story where you suddenly switched to third for the sister's perspective. there it actually worked. here it felt like shoddy editing.

have you considered trying to write a story in full omniscient? i almost think you could pull it off and you see to want to veer that way. read Frank Herbert's Dune. he's the prime example of how to write omniscient.

otherwise it was very much enjoyed. thank you for this and please keep writing.

Great story as always!

I'm trying to not be the "grammar police"; but, (you knew there is a "but" coming) I look at this as being helpful.

When writing a plural such as "tits" or "knees", there is no apostrophe ('). Using an apostrophe makes the word possessive. i.e. Sandra's tits were massive.

Could be my OCD kicking in...

Good story with everyone getting satisfaction with each other. I see Sandra spending lots of time with Alex as time goes by. :-)

It was a fun story, but others commenting on the use of "fanny" are correct . The whole rest of the English specking world probably use the word to refer to a woman's ass. All of us use the words pussy and cunt and even to a certain small extent even quim. AND, pussy and cunt are really hotter and much sexier words.

Miss D, you have a knack for writing stories. I was a little puzzled through the the beginnings as to why Sandra would be behaving as she did, but my questions were soon answered as you tied everything together very nicely towards the end. Wonderfully written, highly erotic story. Would love to read more of about their lives upon returning home. 5⭐ Rafe

Good fantasy story but the characters are unlikeable.

Terrific! Well written and super hot.

Incredible, simply incredible. You should write a romance novel. Ken

A very good and well written story!