All Comments on 'The Impact of Bedsharing'

You put them in that situation, it was going to happen.

Good story. Thanks for the read.

you need to use spell checker and/or find an editor.

your story is rift with wrong tense and a basket of 50 cent words that do not fit or make you look smart

yes, it is only porn but good grammar makes even the worst bearable

The first page was a pretty hot bit of sex. The last bit was just extremely confusing. There was just nothing coherent about the action on that couch during the movie. Except for a drunken 3 way with his wife, Duncan says he wasn't fucking his sister anymore. Then the last line. Who was fingering the sister? Duncan pulled his wife's leg over his to allow him greater access to her pussy I'm guessing. But then he says something to his sister still "mounted" on his wife. I guess the author was trying to create some big reveal but was just a muddled mess of an ending after such a titillating start.

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