All Comments on 'The Initiation Ch. 04'

Excellent addition! Please keep writing! This is a fantastic series!

Wake up, so you know what you are writing. It's "respective offspring":, not "siblings". Siblings are brothers or sisters.

I read all 4. The first was good, the 2nd was better, then it got redundant. The old lady thing was a turn off for me, as was the harry pussy part. I liked some of the bondage stuff, but it was often hard to follow what was going on (the different positions got confusing)....overall it was interesting, but could have been a lot better.

Please find a proof-reader or editor.