All Comments on 'The Kingdom Ch. 13'

I hope this is not the end of the story.It has been interesting reading so far and I want to see a conclusion with no loose ends.

Great addition to the plot.

Don’t worry- the story won’t be wrapping up anytime soon ;) Thanks for the positive feedback!

Unfortunately it’s just made me angry. It’s not BDSM and that’s really off putting IMHO. Hopefully there’s a lot of mindfuckery going on from the shop keeper.

Tess (UK)

Hi Tess. Thanks for the feedback. Earlier drafts of the chapter saw a more mild-mannered shop keeper. And a draft before that didn't even include Bridget at all. I ultimately came to the realization that the circumstance needed a villain. I try to think several chapters ahead when I write and this was one of those plot points that will serve greater significance in the coming chapters.

Hopefully it will all make sense why Jodie's experience at the Market needed to be an extremely negative (and dangerous) one.

Great story! Might be worth considering putting future chapters in the non-consent/reluctance categories to avoid offending people who aren't expecting that aspect.

You make a good point. I definitely don’t want to offend anyone. I’ve requested Lit move all chapters to the non-com/reluctance category. Thanks for the feedback!