All Comments on 'The Kiss Ch. 02'

You play with fire, you get burned. Maybe!

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What a sad bunch of characters!

Another what?

Great twist humane story. Wis tto be bit longer

What a stupid messed-up couple.

Stupid SIMPS

Well I guess both marriages are going the way of open marriage since Bella and May have tasted other men and liked it and the stupid husbands open to it too. Just deplorable people I guess they truly deserve each other I dislike this story despite demander as a good writer.

Entertaining writing style but stupid as fuck.

Where do I find these women who roll over so easily? I mean, you have to laugh. Men spend about 30 years fighting their urges and the women in these stories seem to think they should have a free pass just because they feel a bit horny for a year or two.

again..another dud from this crappy writer. he seems mentally pretty unstable...starts well then goes into the gutter,!

Garbage bullshit RAAC without properly thought reasoning.

1* so bad I couldn't finish it

This was really good up to the point he let her off with her cheating.

Too many caricatures and improbable scenarios.

I normally like your stories, but not this one. All the characters were assholes, not one redeemable feature amongst the lot of them, The plot here was just plain awful, better luck next story.

scores 2/5.

Please put the friendly RAAC tag at the beginning please.

Tom & Bella staying together. I can see that now that they're "even".

Jerry staying with May? She's proven that even with people keeping an eye on her she can't be trusted. Harder to accept the idea of them staying together.

Another sroty huh? No wonder I skip by the Demander duds.

wimp and whore .love they would not know what love is if it hit them in the asshole.

Story didn't add up. From Jerry going to kill wife's lover to picking her up and them laughing as they ran off to bedroom to make love. This didn't add up to the character development earlier in story for both Jerry and Tom.

Moral of the story, revenge sex fixes everything? I gave 3* due to theses holes in storyline.

Was a great read until Denisa stops Jerry from killing Eddie. The story went downhill from there. May cannot be trusted again. And the Jane and Cindy slutty behavior was not believable. Barely 3 stars.

I got dizzy trying to follow the constant misidentification of the characters in this rambling tale. The technical quality of the writing in this one was just awful.

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And so we’re the characters. The women must have gotten a volume discount on Martian Slut Ray treatments. And the guys were barely better. At the end of the day, maybe Tom and Bella can make it. But in all that is holy….why would Jerry ever spend another day with May?

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2 **

What absolute crap. Not up to your normal high quality. Right from Cindy sending video to May's husband but May NOT sending her video to Cindy's husband. Jerry was an absolute retarded cuck and even stupid Tom wouldn;t have done what he did.

The worst character though was Denise. Just garbage that she would do all she did for complete strangers. A whore with a heart of gold!

Just a thought, STD tests for everyone! Actually a fun read, I assume you meant it to be humorous. Now that everyone has”gotten even” maybe Bella will get a go with Jerry?

Ridiculous plot and poor character development. Not the usual from this author.

0 star - violence is just not acceptable as it always gets a ZERO and the story was really lame anyway.

Absolute garbage.

Nice twist at the end

"Another sroty..." [sic] Yep. Just about that convoluted. Waste of time.

Started slow for me, but I soon got involved and loved it. Really liked your Jerry character. 5 ***** cd

What a dumb story. So cheating is the way to solve cheating? Stupid

While I liked the idea for this series and the first story but this isn't remotely like the first story. It absolutely amazes me how you can get off to a good start with your stories and when manage to completely blow them up. FUBAR pretty much describes what you do to a story. In this disaster a full scale nuclear blast from the Martian Slut Gun must have hit Chicago on the weekend of the conference. Then of course you have to throw in your usual multiple person fuck fest. Couldn't let one story go by without one of those. Not to mention the other two sluts swapping in midstream. Totally destroyed your story again. Sadly you have a lot of talent and potential writing but you just can seem to stop from shooting yourself in the head as you go long with your story.

Really enjoyed this story. Some unique twists that were intriguing.

Sometimes i'm pretty sure these authors have never actually had sex before :)

Seriously? All it takes to forgive somebody me deliberately cheating and behaving like ‘wanton sluts’ is for the cheated on spouse to get a freebie from a hooker?

Once somebody cheats and gets away with it , as both Bella and May did, they think they can get away with it again. As long as the husband gets to buy a revenge fuck?

Both the husbands here are pretty sad if the only way they can get some strange is to buy it.

Next time May wants some strange cock at least she has a ‘wing man’ to take part abd cover for her.

Pretty poor take from you here. Denise was as bad as the four cheating wives really, no better as she’d have been as happy covering for them.

If only it was that easy - all involved has the best sex ever with someone other than their spouse

The death penalty in Illinois is no longer used. Hell, Jerry was in Chiraq, of all places. If he'd just yelled something about social justice and looted a bit, he'd have been turned loose with an apology, a beer, and pinkie-swear to appear for trial. I liked Denise's way, better. Dirty cops in Chiraq...

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The plot was initially kind of vanilla, but it took a refreshing turn into Gonzo Land when all four women turned into cheating sluts. Maybe, a line about their SUV being passed over by a UFO from the Red Planet with its Slut Ray on 'High' might've helped. At least I wasn't surprised when Denise, his 'angel', turned out to be an Earth Mother type working security for a Five Star hotel who tricks an ultra-high-priced escort on the side. Nope, fit right in. Loved the drive-home conversation and its allusion to MAD. Sport-on! The money shot? "...Are we all sluts? Or nuts?" Slam dunk!!

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I loved this story, because, the Martian Slut Ray notwithstanding, you KILLED the CLICHE monster! You went the Hunter S. Thompson route, well away from the beaten path, and it was damn near perfect. I think there was a bit of tongue in cheek, but what of it there was, worked perfectly. More like this!! 5++++++++/5!!!

idk these are some weird ppl. they all might have some sort of bipolar or something. their way of thinking changes on a dime that a crazy way to live. if they were real i would suggest medication

He was no better than the cheating slut and they both deserve each other

One Star. Garbage.

YOu sad pathetic Cuckservatives, if only he had rioted and tried to over throw our democracy he would have been handed a lollipop and a pat on the head.

And the cuckservatives below would offer him a full BJ with swallow. So long as he's white and goose steps, right kids!!

Still not a good story, even when the Cuckfederates applaud you, take it with a grain of fascism.

Cuck

Just fucking dumb.

Totally dumb. Unbelievably dumb.

Ridiculous.

Cheating whores. Then violence. Then another whore kisses the wronged husband. Then literally everyone turns into cheaters.

Just. Totally. Dumb.

Idiotic sroty!

Their marriages are over. They'll probably start with swapping, then when that gets boring swinging. Eventually they will meet the right person, or become incurably bored, or for some reason realize that being married is no longer enough, no longer fun enough, exciting enough, sexually or emotionally satisfying enough. You are a faithful spouse for only one of two reasons: internal restraint or external restraint. These whores have no internal restraint, which is driven by character, ethics, self respect. They cheated on their marriages because they had an exciting opportunity and they thought they could get away with it. Or they felt entitled to it, as payback. They now promise fidelity because they know if they get caught a second time they will lose their marriage. Which means if they get another hot exciting opportunity for a galactic fuck, and think they really Can get away with it, this time, they will go for it. I mean why not? It was so fucking incredible the last time.

Without personal virtue it is only a matter of time and opportunity before these people will fuck around again. A ridiculous premise for marriage reconciliation. I hope you get a chance to experience it in your own marriage. Good luck with that.

What a bunch of crap

Comedy and slut ray apocalypse even for the men.

Very good

So..... Jerry sees his wife cheat on him, he's furious, he's devastated, he's broken, the marriage is over, he almost kills the guy his wife cheats with- then.... one day later, after he cheats, too, it's 'eh, whatever'. Such a leap in emotions is not possible, nor is it possible to enter into any of Demander's stories. He runs them over the cliff so fast and so often.

This went from a good story to the fantasy of a teenage boy that has never even kissed a girl.

All of the characters turned into unsympathetic sluts. Stopped reading it once the sex scene started with Denise and Jerry.

1 star

Well that went downhill quickly.

You missed loads of tags off that would have saved me reading this nonsense. From the moment a man who has just seen his wife cheat on him suddenly sleeps with Denise, I gave up and skimmed.

Not interested in stories where cheating on a lifetime of faithful marriage can be 'fixed' by revenge sex.

Interesting ending… mmmm… would have loved to read about Eddie getting more just desserts. I bet he really didn’t have an open marriage… $100 bucks! Thanks I enjoyed this story a lot!

Probably impossible, but perhaps with groveling and pleading, Laurel will disconnect this story from "The Kiss" and remove the "Ch 02" from the title of this one.

Oh she cheated on him! Gosh darn it women will be women amirite? But he had sex so everything is good!

Everyone at the end should have said "JERRY!" in unison with their fists on their hips and rolling their eyes. And the Threes Company theme should have played and credits should have started rolling. Or some other sitcom. But not The Honeymooners. No...Ralph Kramden wouldn't have put up with this. God no. The "to the moon" stuff was a joke. Okay maybe if he was drunk and having a bad day. I mean it was the 1950's after all when it was okay to be racist. BTW that always seemed silly to me how everyone was racist back then. I mean EVERYTHING was either black, white, or some shade of grey. That's the only colors that existed so why on Earth? Some people are just mean like that I suppose. Also Viagra didn't exist yet so I imagine many of the middle age dudes would hit their wives just to get out of trying to get it up for their wives later that night. Protect their ego sorta thing you know? I wonder what shade of grey Viagra would have been. Anyways I digress, I'm pretty sure Ralph would have Mob connections via the Bus Drivers Union. May would have just vanished.

Don't laugh, it's not funny. They would have ended all the women involved and Eddie as well. Nothing fancy. Bullet to the head. Done. And they have means to deal with the bodies. You're always gonna have problems lifting a body in one piece. Apparently the best thing to do is cut up a corpse into six pieces and pile it all together. And when you got your six pieces, you gotta get rid of them, because it's no good leaving it in the deep freeze for your mum to discover, now is it? Then I hear the best thing to do is feed them to pigs. You got to starve the pigs for a few days, then the sight of a chopped-up body will look like curry to a pisshead. You gotta shave the heads of your victims, and pull the teeth out for the sake of the piggies' digestion. You could do this afterwards, of course, but you don't want to go sievin' through pig sh*t, now do you? They will go through bone like butter. You need at least sixteen pigs to finish the job in one sitting, so be wary of any man who keeps a pig farm. They will go through a body that weighs 200 pounds in about eight minutes. That means that a single pig can consume two pounds of uncooked flesh every minute. Hence the expression, "as greedy as a pig".

So yeah Threes Company would be good. OH or how about the theme from Out of this World? You remember that? I had a crush on the main character! Mr Belvedere would be another good choice. Small Wonder, Night Court, The Facts of Life, all would be good choices too. But not The Honeymooners.

Good story through Eddie’s ass kicking, then it died quickly. Just another cheating whore’s story.

Hhmmmm, clever story. LP

Cuckold beating their chests all around.

I thought it was pretty good, until the guys decided to even he score. After that, deciding against divorce, further weakened the story. A man doesn’t have his wife watched, then nearly kill a man, to stay with a woman he doesn’t trust.

Well written but I don't think a guy like Jerry, who went into Beast Mode and almost killed "Eddie" would take slut wife May back, even if he did fuck the lovely and talented Denise. And May would not have gone from the wanton slut she was to being satisfied with her husband, even if he had been schooled by Denise. So 4**** .

Though entertaining, this was just a story about third rate, degenerate losers and particularly dim on all women.

This author needs to meet a better breed of humans.

The men were not much better than the women. Sorta ruins the morality side of things. It's not really even if the thief gets caught and equal payback is had. I can't really give it a 4. Until the end, it may have gotten a 5.

Wow. Just descends into rutting and chaos. No emotional resolution. Hey all even and stay married. No consideration that May has been and out of control slut and adulterer. Jerry also has the video. Maybe Tom and Bella stay married after getting even but why Jerry and May? What was set up ad q good story simply degenerates rapidly.

I disagree with the comments about rutting, morality, poor quality etc. I LIVED the equivalent of this with my wife 18 years into our 34 year marriage. I went off the rails with her BFF on a business trip (twice) great sex with strong emotional overtones. The BFF confessed to her husband and he whined like a bitch so 6 months later when my wife was in town visiting them one Friday night the BFF shoved him and my wife together in a bedroom, locked it and told them to sort it out. My wife decided to teach me a lesson and fucked him blind, calling me the next day to say we were even and for me to NEVER stray again. Neither of us did. I buried my wife a year ago (cancer) and to this day thank God I had the time I did with her. Shit happens, you forgive or you don't. 5 stars for a great story.

Every person in this story is a worthless piece of shit. Probably a direct reflection of the author.

I am not usually a fan of any form of forgiveness where marital infidelity is concerned, -it's normally a case of a cast-iron Cauldron, 4'6" high, stand the bitch (AND/or Bastard) in it, fill with water, winch it up and over the flames, then light the fife, throw in more petrol, add more water, sit down and put your feet up!

This innovative twist in the ending, IMHO had a surprisingly satisfying partial payback, which shows every sign of sustaining it's staying power for some time to come!

Very good fun, Five-Stars, thank you!

R.S.

TOO MUCH CHEATING.

Great story. Thanks for your writing.

Great story about as despicable a menagerie as is possible. The women broke the covenant, anything after that is on them the forgiveness just because you got laid too is well silly.

Too many sex gods in some stories notmuch to like in anyone

Femdom agitprop with a fox guarding the henhouse.

Pathetic

The author always has the woman (or women) falling for some swx magician or tantric lover. Lol. And in this case the husband(s) fuck a goddess(es) and learn to be master lovers. Yeah cheating brings out long, sexually satisfying marriages/sarcasm off.

should have had the car with the 4 sluts crash an they all die

One word,Puerile.

Very silly and very poorly written

In fact i will go with the other comments 'PATHETIC'

2+2=4 Strange conclusion.

Read it again upgraded it to 3/5 from 2/5

No real story other than gratuitous sex, basically porn. No revenge, no teaching moments, just porn and that's just not enough.