All Comments on 'The Lampwatcher Ch. 06'

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abiostudent3abiostudent3over 2 years ago

I love this story, but this chapter needs some work. It feels a little rushed, and in certain places the dialogue gets confused - I don't know if the same person is saying a line twice in a row, or what's going on... But dialogue tags are your friend.

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