by Kripto
Loving the story, Can't wait to read how it goes and how it ties in to the others fully.
Can't wait for the next ep! You're a great writer, the only real criticism I would like to give though is your time transitions aren't too clear. One moment he is in his room sulking, then he transforms for what feels like only a moment, then he has a great plan and his father is already well and truly passed out drunk. Just a small sentence depicting a time lapse, say if he lost track of time while being Max and realized when he looks over at his alarm clock or something?
Overall a fantastic story and you're such a great writer, please keep going! (5 Stars)
I wonder, is this story going to have a sad ending like your last few stories? I'm always a fan of the quality, but the lukewarm or depressing endings always put me off from it.