All Comments on 'The Law of Glork Pt. 01'

What a grt stry really enjoyed it so far. Thinking Arthur c clark, Asimov, Star wars.

This was fun I Can't wait for the next part.

Great start keep going!

Interesting start and I'd love to see where you take it. A few thoughts. Jack seems a little simple to be THE mechanic on Earth's first interstellar trip to meet another species. He's written at sort of a plumber level, and that just does not fit the story. He would be far more observant and cognizant of what is going on around him and be an expert in multiple disciplines. People also train for missions for some time, and the idea that someone would not know whether another team member is married just would not happen. The crew of Gemini 5 (Conrad and Cooper) called their mission "5 days in a trash can". They had trained for years together and knew each other's lives in detail and had swapped all of their stories, so they just sat in silence for the entire time with trash floating around them. Finally, a technical note: 30% higher gravity would kill them all in a few days to weeks at most, and certainly not leave any energy for even one, let alone 10+ wives.

Great story. Fun and innovative. Looking forward to next chapters.

Very interesting especially the fact that he's being blackmailed under threat of war to force him to be a king. What a strange scenario to be in, I will be waiting for the next chapter though don't keep me waiting too long

I hope more will come soon

I love it so far. It seems so full of fresh ideas and I can’t wait for more!

Dear Anonymous:

Sorry about the confusion. Jack is ABSOLUTELY too simple to be here, and he's utterly confused as to why he was chosen. It will be made a bit clearer in later chapters, but it has to do with the fact that no one else could work the Pathfinder properly. He was the one who figured out where to put it and how to make it function, even though he didn't know how. NASA felt incredible pressure to have the First Meeting, otherwise they never would have sent a team without a COMPLETE knowledge of how it worked (though they sure tried). They didn't have many other options, and their team took painstaking effort to make sure everything went perfectly smoothly.

Also, when I did my research for this, I didn't find anything suggesting that slightly increased gravity would kill someone. From what I found, it seemed like some astronauts were already training for much higher differences than a mere 30%. Otherwise, I suppose I simply have to admit that I am no scientist, and just leave it with the mysteries of fiction (sometimes it's hard to write sci-fi because I'm so ignorant).

Thank you all so much for your comments! I'd love to answer any questions you guys have!

This is a very nicely weird story. Keep it coming please :)

Its not unreasonable at all to have humans surviving higher g in the future.

I love this story. Keep going. Thanks.

Your story has a great deal of potential. Your characters are developing nicely. A good setup with many questions remaining to be answered.

Being more into CFNM, incest-taboo and threesome stories; I took this dive into Sci-Fi as a diversion from "the usual." This story is so far beyond MY simple imagination that I'd give it a 7 on your 1 to 5 rating scale. What kind of person WROTE this ?? It's written as if the author is writing this story as "just another, although more complicated, day at the office." The genius is humble and modest. Gotta love it. I'd love to meet, no . . . not just meet . . . . I'd love to be friends with this person. Thank you for writing this. I'm impressed.

This is great! Very well written, and the story is interesting. I can't wait to read what happens next. Actually, I will not, and read the next part right now :)

I'm loving this already.

Cool start.

Well written and interesting.

Please keep it coming

Thank you for sharing this delightful, creative story!

Correction for page 3: Lily rushed to his side when she was [saw] him wavering.