All Comments on 'The Long Ride Pt. 02'

Very Very nice we love it and hope you keep it going for a while.

Amazing! 5 stars

Damn it Soul again. Don't know how you do it but you do keep them coming. Just don't see how you have enough time in the day for all these stories.

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This I like a hybrid of some below par loving wives story where the ex wife dominates the cuck and a decent romance story.

The Itzel part is almost irrelevant, or the Vanessa part is.

You are trying to pack to much into it and it ends up being nothing of anything.

Couples counseling? Seriously?

Don't listen to that anonymous retard, keep up the amazing work

Nice follow up, can't wait for more. As always thank you for your work.

Ed

Can't wait for the next part.

Great story!

5

Enjoying the story very much!

This story has so much depth, Cal is a great father and his love for his daughter and Itzel is matched for his loathing of his ex girlfriend and her family that it keeps you drawn in to see where the next shoe will drop.

Oops he forgot to rubber up.

I keep waiting for the word Adoption to pass Vanessa's lips or henry's for that matter, but it never happens. It appears that nothing but trouble is headed our hero's way, since all sorts of misdeeds have been mentioned, but I must say, not the one I thought I would hear has been brought up...yet!

Great pair and story Great father and characters

Your storyline is spot on. No overbearing or over used words during the sex scenes. Can't wait for chapter 3.

And?

The perfect father, always think of his daughters welfare, except of course when wanting to be with his sexy lovely woman. My wife had 4 children we had to escape from now and then to have our fun before we were married but luckily one them was old enough to baby sit the younger ones and of course the older one would kid us a bit. Keep writing can't wait to read the climax to the story.

No qualms about the writing, plot, characters. But your love scenes are but cringe-worthy.

"hard, throbbing, engorged rod"...... seriously!!!!

Great story, loving it and the characters. I feel as if I’m there with them.

Well done Siul71.

Vanessa... Henry... And her parents are way too pushy concerning what is basically some one else's child... Henry's says he's going to provide for her regardless of what her father thinks... I would have told the lot of them to kick rocks...

-jaye-

Vanessa certainly hasn't changed. Lying to Cal, threatening to take away Shari, explaining how even if she lost he would be dead broke. Not to mention manipulating him, demanding that she be a part of Shari's life. Everything bis still about her wants and needs. As I said, she hasn't changed. I certainly wouldn't want my child to be influenced by such a person, mother or not.

But he goes ahead and accepts it. Not to mention asking the person threatening to take custody of his child to babysit? Sounds insane to me.

I feel Shari is not written as a typical thirds greater. In many cases she seems to act like she is 4 and in other cases she acts like she is teenager or older.

I still like the premise and the story overall. I just can't understand the actions of Cal regarding Vanessa.

It would be a quick legal hearing. Judge would tell vanessa she has no legal standing. She would say she was too young when she signed away rights, and judge would end it saying suenyour parents then. Legally this would be very quick.

Can’t help but think this is all going to go tits up soon.

The revelation about Sheri having scarlet fever caused me to recall the book

Bombshell: The Life and Death of Jean Harlow by David Stenn. The girl who grew up to be the movie star we know as Jean Harlow had scarlet fiver as a child. After effects of that caused her kidneys to be weak, and coupled with alcoholism and quack doctors, led directly to her death. However, so obscure was this condition that it was not uncovered or realized until this author wrote the book. Read it. I dare you to put it down! I like your story, too.

Great second chapter. Love it. AAAAA++++

When in love and in 'sex' the sex becomes much better. My previous remarks hold true. Some men have notches on their bedpost or keep score. I guess I'm a bit weird, I married the two women I had sex with. The first one only lasted 13 years, turns out I wasn't "good" enough for her she wanted to branch out and see what else was out there, end of marriage, her choice not mine. Two girls, any thought how the divorce would affect them? No of course not. Selfish? Yeah, definitely. But what can you do? I was a wimp and didn't understand anything. Divorce? Yeah. Met a good woman with 4 kids, lasted 40 years, go figure. hope this guy figures it out and gets rid of the receptacle mother before its to late. Good story.

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