All Comments on 'The Loves of My Life'

But you do need to separate the narrative from the dialogue. The writing seems to be just separated by paragraphs consisting run on sentences. Still writing out a story takes much imagination and effort. Keep it up!

Thank you for sharing a bit of your life....really special....thank you again

Loved the story, it was beautiful thank you for sharing this story.

You really need an editor. Many many grammar issues.