All Comments on 'The Magazine Girl'

Ruined by switching back and forth between present and past tense. Pick one!

Dimmu, who writes nothing is suddenly an expert on writing. Well done, in fact I was so very pleasantly surprised by your use of the English language.

Dimmu, who hasn't written anything is suddenly a critic. I liked your word smith and how you did it. Carry On ! ! !

I liked how you wrote this story. At first I thought it was too stream of consciousness

and detailed, but the more I read, I enjoyed reading the story,

Burninglove

I enjoyed your tale very much. It was unhurried and well written I thought. Your characters were real and full. If you have a sequel to this, I'd love to read it.

Please continue if you can. Great start! What is her back story? Will they fit and become a couple? I love her spontaneity, such a delightful and life altering change for a hurting solitary soul. Didn't mine the tense changing at all.

And yes we do miss " The voice of the Dawgs" but you start in Athens then we were at Boddy Dood before the end of the game I sure hope Tech lost

I really enjoyed your story, especially your use of descriptive language, which I found almost musical in reading it.. You captured my interest from the beginning and I could visualize every scene . I have to honestly say that this simple, short story is one of the best I have read on this site ...the eroticism flowed so easily from the scene you set and I really began to engage with the characters. Please continue writing.!!!👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼

You could have went 3 or 4 different ways . I like the laid back thoughtfulness style of your story. Thanks for sharing.

What a lovely take.

I'm completely smitten with Gwendolyn!!!!

Alas....

Please continue...

FDD

Cannot decide if u r a Brit writing as an American or vice versa.

Moving on

I am a lurker, not a member. That said, I have been reading erotica for decades and NEED to tell you how well this is written, and how much it moved me . I will now be working my way through your oeuvre. Great piece