All Comments on 'The Man That Converted Me Pt. 03'

super story xxx loving it xxx

God I'd love to be her little bitch , so hot cant wait to read more

super story cant wait for next part

Just wanted to drop a line to tell you how much I'm enjoying this wonderful story series. Brendan's transformation to Breanna and use by Lamar has been exhilarating. And with Jenna, Kylie, and Dwayne poised to join the fun more Super hot Hijinx must be coming soon. Keep up the great work. xoxo

Too much coincidence, he can't get it up, he has weird dreams and he doesn't look in her book bag? Bullshit! Also, getting Viagra from a doctor or online is the easiest thing in the world. Is the MC just that dumb? Obviously. If anything, A weekend like he had would have supercharged his relationship with his girl. She is obviously in on what happened and he's being played. Soon he'll get cucked and this will be yet another very predictable read. It really started out well, it's now going a bit off.

Looking forward to part 4

So they’re going to blackmail and rape him now?

I'm surprised Brandon didn't say anything at all. Also sad that he couldn't get a boner for his girlfriend. It would have been hotter to make him a more insatiable bi-curious slut.

Could have been a bit more fleshed out on why kylie would want to participate and brandon give a bit more of a struggle. Otherwise great job.

Loving the direction this is taking and can't wait to read more

The first few parts were interesting, but now he's a forgetful fucking cuck that can't say no. Oh and no one knows what the symbols are on the suits and he forgot the Viagra when that was the only thing on his mind. Not a fan of the MC being an idiot. It's turned into yet another predictable cuck piece. I'm out.

The story is ruined. The anxiety from Kylie not knowing and the cat and mouse game added so much. The whole trance, dreamland, not getting hard and agreeing to everything, is a stretch. Not big on the big in cucking the MC. The first two parts were a totally different vibe.

This story got so stupid

I read all three chapters and absolutely loved them. I can’t wait to read the next chapter.

Worst. Sequel. Ever.

I’ve received very mixed feed back from this Story. Would you guys prefer I worked on part 4 next or do a rewrite named that will become a separate story line and go in another direction? If you think it should be rewritten, what should I change and what direction should it go? If you’re happy with the story and want part 4, what are you hoping happens or would like to see happen?

A good story but the end of chapter 3 was a little rushed. The build up was great & the slow evolution in the begining of chap. 3 with the girlfriend naive about what was going on was fantastic. As to all the harsh criticism, we all need to take it easy. These stories are not easy to write. These are your stories so write them how you want. Rewrite them if you want. ( If you do rewrite, slow it down with more innuendos & a slower transition with more slightly humiliating, feminizing scenarios like slightly feminine clothing. Or making him do more feminine acts around the other three while on vacation. Having the girlfriend use the strap on on him is great. Maybe have the Dr. a friend of Lamar who prescribes med.s that are actually female hormones. Brandon & Kylie could go to a black female counselor for issues with their relationship & she recommends Kylie take a more dominant role in the relationship. She could recommend chastity as a way to have him build up sexual tension which may help him get it up. Of course not the real reason. If not no worries. Write what you like. Maybe write another story along similar themes but the protagonist is in college with a black roommate & get stuck at rich roommates cabin, etc...., then two couples go on spring break, etc... It could be a prequel from when Lamar was in college & did this before. Write from the 3rd person or from the White roommates perspective. Thanks for the stories & keep up the good work. You are a great writer.

I'm loving this story, I dream of being Brianna, I would be as submissive and stupid as her, I love being a slut addicted to BBC❤️

Oh my god! please I want and need the next part!

Just a note haha, a peeve haha. You use "haha" way haha, way haha, way too much haha. It's not a sentence ender haha like the '.' period. The overuse haha makes it read like your characters have Tourette's haha or extreme social anxiety or something haha. Haha.

Otherwise, a solidly hot story series. Thank you for sharing it.

I really do like this story, but I’m just not a big fan of cruelty or over humiliation is all, really kills my enjoyment, I was expecting that Lamar makes all three into his harem of sluts and Kylie is supportive of Breanna, it’s your story and you can do what you like, but some kindness and support on Kylie’s end would go a long way.

Thanks for the suggestions. Please keep them coming. I am doing a rewrite and it’s performance vs the original will determine the direction I take part 4