All Comments on 'The Marine & The Beauty Queen Ch. 02'

by OldSarge69

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AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
whydoncha

Whydoncha wait until you have at least three pages before you publish??

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
More!!!

Agreed! Cliff hanger, we want more! Why 1 page?!!

john1946john1946over 10 years ago
ok

Next time, maybe a couple pages?????? Thanks

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago

The father is retired Marine, not former Marine. Once a Marine, always a Marine!

OldSarge69OldSarge69over 10 years agoAuthor
Comments noted

Thanks for all the comments. Yes, I wish I had made this chapter longer, but it just seemed like a good place to break. This is the first story I have ever submitted to Literoricia, and I wasn't exactly sure how pages in Word would translate to pages on Literoticia. Now I know. The entire six chapter story has already been submitted, but for my next story (already written as well), I will definitely change the chapter breaks to make each chapter longer. Again, thanks.

betrayedbylovebetrayedbyloveover 10 years ago
Oh Well

Susan seems like she is in love. Why did she cheat? On to ch.3.

AnonymousAnonymousover 10 years ago
m1a1

Like your style. FYI m1a1 is approximately 63 tons.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Semper Fi

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