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Interesting concept~ Playful and descriptive, great story Good Luck and Happy Hallowwen (~_*)
It was an interesting concept - some mystical, erotic powers contained in a mask - but the encounters between the characters were almost comical. I would have loved a story where the couples fought their forbidden, uncontrollable urges until they finally succumbed to them. Slow, erotic stripping off of their outfits...the women's clothing could have been much more provacative.
I hope you try again but with more eroticism!
That was one funny story. The idea of a mask with powers was a good one. My only complaint is you didn't make it a real foursome with the twins. LOL
Good luck.
... and the birds repeating things was a riot. It would've been hotter had the encounters been a little less rushed and the physical stats downplayed. Good luck!
The birds were a nice touch. A really cute story even though incest isn't my thing. Good luck!
tale. well written and I loved the birds. Thank You. Ronnie W.
Way too cursory and quick. No real depth.