All Comments on 'The Master Gene Ch. 17'

I'm still enjoying the storyline but this chapter seemed a bit rushed. The explanation of Ben's slave's actions does fall in line though. Now we will see how Derrick will somehow manage a harem worthy of a mideaval persian prince.

Of all the things I imagined Jessica saying after sex with Derrick, that was not it. Does that mean she’s back to normal, not enslaved to anyone?

@strappungMan, this story has shown me this many women and this infatuation would be too much to have, you need a limited number of temp relationships. The author managed to mostly make it work. I'd just like a tolerable number that I could imagine managing, maybe 3? A no d then it would wear off and how you treated me them would be affect what happened next.

It does seem rushed and details/explanations and story plot is missing and glossed over but it does have a good set up with him trying to reverse what Ben did

Keep at it. You're doing well.

Just read the finish to this story and it went from being a nearly perfect story to “oh alright then (insert the “Don’t Like That” meme here)”

Can we not have lesbianism every time there is a story about multiple girls there is always lesbians sex even when the girls are straight the there just like maybe if you eat my Pusey you’ll like it then all of a sudden their like damn guess I like pussy now if there is no reason for the characters to engage in it don’t have them engage in it only 3 of them are lesbian so only 3 of them should be having lesbian sex

You're still fucking up the names.

I think you're doing a good job with this story. Keep it up!

in response to someone in the comments: love the "lesbian sex".. people may be bi/pan/whatever.. who says people who like cock cant love pussy as well

I hate reading the comments, it almost seems that some just want to troll the writer, I would love to see what they could write and post here! These authors don't have a staff to review the chapters before they are posted.

Dishwasher please continue this is your work, most of us respect your skill and imagination. We are all wondering what will happen with the new girls n the next chapter. Ignore the haters and bullies that haunt these pages!

Thank you

Person relying to another person you do realize that sexualities exist right and just cause you like sick doesn’t mean you’ll like pussy and vice versa or like either of them so you need to stop being phobic especially heterophobic and the last I check only 3 character are lesbian the others are straight if he wants sex between females it should only be with females who sexuality allows that but he should just make females lesbian or bi to do that cause the just as bad unless he wants to go the porn logic route and that’s fine if he does but this story at least seems to try and want to be and to stay grounded in reality

Still hoping this story continues. There are lots of nice threads here that need wrapping up.

Looking forward to the next chapter and wrap-up. Don't take too long.

I have thoroughly enjoyed the story so far. Can wait for the next chapter. The fact that Amanda, Amy, Judy, and Sarah all became bisexual because Sarah suggested that Master might enjoy watching them together was perfect.

A harem story where none of the women ever have sex with each other has always seemed strange and not very realistic to me. A bunch of girls just sitting around waiting for their turn with the only guy in the relationship is just bad lazy writing. Thank you for not making that mistake.

Great Story, Thank you.

More please...

And for the benefit of other commenters,

In my experience almost all women will be up for some bi play given a safe, approving opportunity.

If You are bothered by girl-girl sex, you really need to grow up and learn. It's cool and can be very exciting for the male.

everything is so amazing so far in this great story lines plot line are great.. just can't wait for the next set of chapters to come out.. great and amazing only bad part is a few spelling mistakes here and there... and yes please more as well.. really want to know what Jessica want to talk about with derrick

Hi

Have waiting for next step, seems your imagination has left number of doors open. Look forward to going through one of them and seeing where it leeds.

Nice for change to have a good guy in control.

So, the master that won is the one that left his slaves enough autonomy to act successfully while he is unconscious? Nice point.

Also, please give this some definitive wrap up. There's not enough here to provide any supposition.

This was a really fun read. I do hope there will be more as this chapter really feels like it leaves the story unfinished.

Looks like Dish has left the building...

Good story. Feels left off. Could definitely see more chapters to finally end it without unanswered questions.

Did he really enslave his own sister? Does she find a way to undo it? Does he add more slaves in the future? How many children did he have and did he let them activate early? Just some questions you know?

Anyway. Fun read. Would enjoy more if the author decided to release more.

just so people know, yes this was actually completed.

there is a chapter 18 and epilogue. he just never put them here for some reason.

Dam wish more was here that some that knows where it was finished at would say so.

Where is Chapter 18 and the epilogue?

For those who are interested, chapter 18 and the epilogue can be found on mcstories.com, no idea why he didn't publish it here as well

@nyterambler, @Ogfy, @tinfoilhat, @jschmosucks, @RonanJWilkerson, sirbatshitcrazyESQ, @Vadar: It's on Erotic Mind Control Archive

I was happy to read the last chapter and epilogue, at least. Hopefully Dishwasher will either continue with the story or write another that ties in with it and lets us know a bit about all the characters' futures. Personally, I found the epilogue disappointing after so many good chapters. There was a lot left open and virtually no wrap up for any of Derrick's main harem, who were pretty much left flapping in the wind in favor of Ben's former girls. Still, overall this was a really good series with just enough tension to make it interesting and no devolving into sharing or any of that junk that other unimaginative 'harem' story writers seem to fall back on. Between this and "How I REALLY Met Your Mother," Dishwasher's become a favorite. Hopefully he'll pop back around and publish some more stories for us to enjoy.

I did read the chapter 18 and epilogue on mcstories.com but the ending was really different, can make a small season 2 out of it or probably a good season 2 if written in a manner.