All Comments on 'The Midwest Apartment'

Loved the build-up great job of seduction!! Cant wait for part 2.. Dont disapoint us loyal readers.. Excellent start!

This was a truly great story; not continuing it would be sadistic in and of itself! The seduction, the self-doubt, the feel; the whole build up was beyond amazing! The posibilities feel endless. From prequels of a non-cons nature all the way to a political utopia wherein a beautiful and breathtaking weding occurs followed by an intensly erotic honeymoon. I am certain that the next Harry Potter is not being awaited with as much anticipation as your next instalment.

to a story thats going to be an erotic tale of two women in love with each other

Hi - This story was great ! I very seldom being a guy read lesbian stories, but I got so hard and horny just reading it !

Maybe, Amanda can get off by Julie sucking her big tits ! Thank you.......

I would love to read more chapters of ya'll exploreing.

U made me very erect.65B1

... but it definitely finished way too fast. This is probably a good argument for why men shouldn't try to write lesbian erotic stories. It definitely could have used a lot more patience, especially if you were going to continue it into another chapter. But there is a good start here, most of it seemed pretty realistic and I appreciated the dialogue between the characters.

Leave lesbian stories to WOMEN!

Your paragraphs are much too long. You'll lose readers who can't get through gigantic paragraphs such as you have consistently written on the first page. Before you attempt your next lesbian story, you might want to ask an honest to goodness lesbian for some guidance. Good luck peggy

Good Buildup. Look forward to a Hot ending.

Akward phrasing.

Almost as if english/american is not your native language.

Sorry this story just shouted out male fantasy, (dudetodude) said it all

Ambivalent. It is kind of hot but at the same time Julie takes advantage of Amanda. Julie used her position of power to seduce Amanda who needed therapy due to her traumatic experiences. The only positive aspect is that it shows that anyone in power can be corrupt.