All Comments on 'The Mountain Ch. 02'

keep going

Was excited to see the second chapter

This looks like a great and very promising story!

Please, do continue :)

4*

The average lit page is 3800 words so you can judge your submissions by that. If you use something like Word to write, there is a word count function in it.

Crap, hit the 3* button accidentally. Sorry about that.

Over my best expectations.

4 stars, because I'm waiting for the third chapter in order to give you more

I'm really liking it. I love his intense dominance, how he's immediately in control and demanding her obedience. I like too how she has a secret that is giving her some strength and self-control. And now I'm curious and eager for more - well done MariLeigh

Great story and glad you have continued! Look forward to more.

You are doing excellent and deserve applause. Of course we all love your writing and would love to read as much as possible, but I think it's ultimately up to you. He can write his own damn story if he wants to. And it's not like it's ridiculously short any way

For a second read through, is Sheera an Omega too? Do Sheera and her father know that Lucy is an Omega?

You write so very well! Don't limit yourself to any one genre, you could write anything!