All Comments on 'The Neighborhood Ch. 01'

loved that story very got and horney.

Pick a perspective and stay with it.

I like that you're telling it from all perspectives. You're writing style is nice. The imagination you're putting into your characters and their thoughts & feelings is excellent. My only disappointment is that this is the only thing you've posted so I have to wait to read more. :)

Somehow more believeable than most stories here - a good job of two viewpoints, though Chris's seems a little more real than Emily's, so I guess you're a guy. I hope you'll keep writing - you seem a natural!

I guess when Chris finds out his mother did see him peeking, things are going to develope for all. One happy family. Thanks.

Great start to the story. No messing about straight into a bit of sex