All Comments on 'The New Girl'

I'm sorry but that was awful !

Nothing like getting the semester off to a fun start (as well as your first post). Sex well done — of course that was 90 percent of this short piece. Not complaining, just hoping we get to know the roommates. Maybe this piece is simply a prologue to a budding, fun and wild relationship.

This feels rushed and not thought out - the scene idea is hot though and could be built on.

The scene was hot but you could have done better with a build up to make the sex feel earned