All Comments on 'The New Roommate'

Great story, way to go Maecus

Great Tory! Way to go Marcus

The plot is good, but it could be a lot better. 1. To many simple declarative sentences. You’re not writing a business report. 2, The characters are flat. Show us that Marcus is introverted, don’t tell us. Show us Miranda’s argument with her ex, don’t tell us. Show us that’s she’s beautiful on the inside. 3. Both work with tech. They can come together with her having a tech issue at work that he helps her solve. That can build her respect for him, his comfort with her, and acsense of gratitude. 4. Don’t repeat. Once you’ve established that Marcus is introverted, you don’t need to say it again.

Great story! The nice guys win more than you think!!

Mushy but good

5 Stars. I loved the story - please keep going with these two.

Nice sweet story about two believable people. I really liked how Marcus let Miranda help build up his confidence to ask out his crush.

I LOVED it!

Nice sweet loving story. A few mistakes and errors but not enough to detract from the story, end a little bit rushed but still very good.

Adorkable! My wife and I actually had an old friend who used that very word! Cute story, from a long-time fan to you. I was kind of a dork over 30 years ago, who got the hot girl. Thanks for legitimizing my memories.

To echo some of the other comments on here, definitely a very hot story with some erotic ideas. I particularly enjoyed the nylon play and felt that there could have been more details and the scenes could have been more fleshed out. Such exciting ideas need to be enjoyed sensuality and gradually. Same with the character development and progression. Show, don't tell when you're doing characterisation. You've got some great archetypes and story backbone going on. Some proper character development, richer dialogue would have pushed this story to a 5! Don't rush the story. Usually from complete strangers to getting married would take more than four mere pages... Marcus and Miranda might have rushed things a bit there. Haha. Would have loved to see this as a two or even a three parter. Maybe your next story can be about their married life and the next level they'll take their nylon play and explore the fetish in more detail. Keep it up.

Very cute! There's some romance there, which helps.

LOVED THIS STORY! The romance, the eroticism, the sex! TRULY wonderful

Great!

excellent story!

hot!

Great story 5 stars, and a new follower

Nylonian's comments were right on. A beautiful, sweet, and well-written love story.

Nice but it should have continued

This is a six-star story. T H A N K Y O U!!

Miranda and Marcus took a chance on each other for sharing an apartment and ended up in love and engaged.

The story line, the progression from roommates to buddies, then friends then boyfriend and girlfriend and finally fiance and fiancee was wonderful.

Thank you for all the effort and multiple drafts to publish such a great story. I also thank the people who helped you with everything from story-line to punctuation (I write professionally).

I am looking forward to reading more of your stories.

Sign me "Grateful in Canada"

This is a sweet, tender, beautiful romance story. The characters truly come alive to the reader, and the plot engaging from start to finish. This story, one of the author's finest, needs a sequel. Five stars.

Wish I could give this 10 stars. This is the type of story i like to read.

Absolutely amazing. This story reminds me of another story, Roommate or More?

These feel good stories are welcome change. Kudos.