All Comments on 'The New Year Party Ch. 01'

Great start looking forward to the next chapter

Another great story in the making

Nice build up Bunty sounds like a lot of fun

Another great story in the making I am looking forward to the next chapter

The transition from backstory to "my big fat cock" and sleeping with the staff was very, very abrupt and jarring. You set him up to be saint-like then suddenly moved him into #metoo territory. Poorly handled.

It has a lot of potential for extra parts. Looking forward to it.

I can't wait for the next chapters, I love your writting.

The dialogue is not the best mate. It needs quite a bit of polishing

Not quite a five star. Punctuations are necessary and very helpful when used in the right places. Had trouble recognizing when one sentence ended and the next one started. But, it’s a good story. Like where this is going. Can’t wait for the next chapter.

I always enjoy your stories but even more now that you have expanded character names. I am looking forward to the next chapters

please continue

Great start Jack. Interesting to see how you get this sorted out. It is good to read that you brought May back into the story. 5 stars

A nice opening chapter looking forward to see how the story develops

FOUR STARters. First I lost forgot I'm in the erotic section, next he's the Lord of all pussies around. But I'm hooked to see what revealing lingerie and debouchery is coming along. Go on!

Too many run-on sentences with random commas.