All Comments on 'The Night It All Began'

Engaging and beautifully written. Keep up.the good work!

Thanks for the start of what promises to be a great story. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Sounds like it will have a sad ending :'(

Continuing is a must

Thank you for deciding to write for Literotica and especially for this amazing maiden story. You really must continue with it - it was very good indeed. If you do get any bad comments, don't let them get to you and remember - you CANNOT please everyone; you most certainly pleased me!

That was crazy good! Can't wait for more. Christopher is sure to be an unrelenting Master and I can't wait to see what happens next! 5 stars. ~K.

The story crept up on my slowly, and I was prepared to feel good about it. But by the end, it had surpassed my expectations and I am hugely impressed. I hope you keep up your writing. I am a fan!

i loved it! What a wonderful fantasy,,please continue

huggggggggggs and thank you

suzanne

Very well written. Enjoyed it all and ready to see what happens next

My only criticismwould be you don't know the difference between your and you're. Learn it before the next chapter, or, at least get an editor.

I am thankful you sent that comment. I went through my copy and did find two your/you're 's that were incorrect. It happens, I've been thinking of finding an editor. I don't suppose you'd volunteer? I can assure you, however, that I do know the difference between the two. Your - being a possession and you're - an abbreviation of you are.

~Madijo

I thought it was rather well written...

Looking forward to more

Please continue the adventure!

Still one of my favorites. Please return.

Please continue this story. Seems to me it could be something wonderful.