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AnonymousAnonymous3 months ago

That first long paragraph was jammed with so many adjectives it made me dizzy. IMHO, you could have started the story with this:

"And always, the house was waiting. Always, it was watching."

I would find that intriguing and it would make me want to find out what it is about this house that is so foreboding..

You could fill in details along the way.

laladoodielaladoodie3 months ago

Oh this was awesome, when is the next chapter if any it felt like a cliff hanger this ending did it not?

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Just trying to get some experience writing erotica. I hope to focus on Romance, but would love to cover every erotic category at some point.