All Comments on 'The Older Woman'

This story is the literary equivalent of the classic stereotype of a porn movie.

"Hey. I'm da plumber. I'm here ta 'fix' yer pipes."

"Oh. Good." And sex ensues.

The mother bursts through the door (and somehow, your two characters have never met before), "Couldn't sleep? Me either. I'm Tammie's Mom, by the way." Huh? Is she there to 'fix' her pipes? The sex was hot, but the dialog was so lame it was actually a distraction. Unless this story was meant as satire, you kind of screwed up. I think that if you could improve the dialog between characters, you could write a pretty decent story, but until then, to quote Dianne Wiest, "Don't speak. No. Don't speak."

Ignore the comments of Anonymous..

You have started on a journey that can go on and on... Please do continue.

A nice debut. Keep at it.

I second the comments below--ignore Anonymous. So what if it wasn't perfect--it was still fun to read. Keep it up....

You need to proof read your story before posting....a lot of spelling errors, orther wise of good story.

All I can say is WOW!

Keep it going and let those thoughts come to story form. Very nicely thought out and detailed.

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Well done, a good story, it got me worked up!

I am looking forward to the next chapter with Tammie, I hope it's equally as descriptive.

Don't worry about being criticised for grammar or spelling, those, like me, who enjoy it can work around that sort of minor problem.

Keep writing sweetie.

This story sucked.

Wonder if Tammie and Lacy ever had a fling....next chapter should be interesting!!!

Well, this certainly was entertaining, especially at the end where the daughter decided she didn't want to be left out haha

Obviously written by a guy, you should re-read, and re-write with major improvements, the skeleton is there but needs to be fleshed out.

This sure does read like it was written by a male.

Vagina envy, perhaps?

When I read stories like this, it makes me think I should have been a woman instead. I truly love eating pussy and love the knowledge that I have just helped a beautiful woman achieve an all consuming orgasm. Thanks for the read!

it did lack some suspense and detail with background on how she became interested in trying some girl on girl. but I did enjoy it. details on pubic hair were late in the story, along with details on scent and tastes, could have added a lot to this well written chapter.