All Comments on 'The Origins of a Domme'

I took control, and gave you one star for a boring story.

I disagree with the term "Boring",

It is just that it is kind of sterile in the sense that we don't really get a sense of how your female character felt when all this was happening. And very few hints about how the guys were feeling other than as rivals.

You didn't tell us WHY the female character considers this the turning point in her domme life. You gave us the mechanics of what happened, but you didn't paint the pictures of what was going on inside their heads. Sex, of any sort, is 95% mental and 5% physical. You gave us the 5%.