All Comments on 'The Parable of Brian Brown Ch. 01'

hope you keep up the good work

sissyboys or girlboys writers,wife whore in his bed fucking he puke.first kick some ass and put foot in wife ass.whining and crying like a little girl.

You are doing OK, but I respectfully suggest you try harder to present your characters as doing things that humans would logically do. Perhaps Diane is insane, but for that many years she never showed any symptoms? Not very logical, as you offered no hints of prior incidents. I do look forward to the next chapter.

He started off as a pathetic wimp. Man him up as it is said and let him get hold of himself and dump the bitch asap.

With that pronounced lack of strength I am surprised the protagonist kept the antagonist for 10 years. Shock or not his response was atrocious. Also need an editor. Many mistakes including use of wrong word. Ex predominate should be preeminent. Weak effort.

Wow, that was wild! Please keep the story coming--it's absolutely impossible to tell where it's headed, but I'm hooked. I want to read the rest!

Thanks, ohio

Somebody has a dandy of a story going please continue. Thanks for a great read I'll be on the lookout for a part two.

Where's the rest of the story.

Always hate MCs who find solace in a bottle rather than dealing with life.