All Comments on 'The Perils of Paula Pt. 03'

These interlaced stories of yours are brilliant. Your style of writting puts the reader right into the story so we feel like we know the characters. Thats how it is for me any way. Three more lovers and Adele's journey of exploration sound like something i would love to read about.

Thank you

Jc

Another excellent chapter!

I may have said this before, Shaima, but it's admirable the way in which you can metaphorically juggle all these story ideas and keep them in the air. You had one or two relevant and incisive things to say about religion in this story and I always seem to learn something new about Aussie life. Mention of 'Bundy' reminds me of a lethal Austrian rum which, if I remember correctly, is 85% alcohol. I did think that as a patriotic Aussie, Paula should have supported the Sydney funnel web against the Brazilian wandering spider ("My spider's tougher than your spider!" "Oh yeah?"). There was one little slip: when the two are snogging on the sofa, in one paragraph Adele became Tayla. Still, not a terrible typo and as usual the whole is worth five stars.

In stars of course. What a lovely story with a slow start of the final encounter, a build-up that kept me very much on edge and that ended in a glorious sexual scene. You definitely have it to be a succesful writer. But of course, I knew that all along.