All Comments on 'The Phoenix and the Ice Queen Pt. 01'

I enjoyed this chapter. The punctuation was off more than a few times, but the plot and the characters were well developed and that is the essence of a good story. I will be looking for the next chapter.

Look forward to the next part.

Also looking forward to the next part.

I read very few multipart stories ... since over time some never continue and ghost away. I like this story and the characters so I'll take a chance and make a reminder to check every so often for the next part. Here's hope it will be a "5" all the way !!

Very impressive. Enjoyed your character development and interaction between Brandon and Mel. As well, I think Brandon's integrity and honesty is essential to the plot development. Looking forward, like Harddaysknight, for the next chapters. K

Good start and looking forward to the next part already. Well written; good characterisation; lots of bumps already visible for the future. Great!

This a good, but very slow start.

Excellent!! Looking forward to see where this goes!

Liking it so far, don’t hurry the sex, looking forward to a slow burn romance. 5*

Good Job! You've got me hooked.

Looking forward to Part 2.

My first assessment was that it seemed to me moving much too slowly, but I'm ready to amend that.

It is very slow, but you do a good job of managing the flow to keep it interesting.

Ill be looking forward to future installments.

5*

Tc

is this actually a literotica story? Or just a story?

Well written, but you're playing the part of "Ice Queen" a little too far over the line, in my opinion. Guess we'll see what part 2 brings. 5* for now!

Really enjoyed part 1 can't wait for 2 thanks for the great work

Red Heads don't get grey hair. Look it up. The color fades but never do they have grey streaks.

Look, I like the story, but the continuity shift on the birthday was mind bending. Seems like you had another years worth of story you just deleted.

Just the 2 going out for a casual steak dinner in jeans because she couldn't get to boston to see her mum, to being out at a fancy fish restaurant with her mum and mentor!!

What a change since her birthday dinner,,, she misses her flight, then she agrees to a causal steak dinner just the two of them,,, then boom,,, mom and mentor are there and mentor takes a jab at him to make him feel like shit, and Mel changes her attitude in a heartbeat,, so far a 4⭐️ story for the build up