All Comments on 'The Pied Piper Finds Love'

Delightful story!

5

Such a lovely love story!!! Had to use a handkership after reading it ;-)

Five stars.

Nicely done!

I loved it, beautiful love story! 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!

Really lovely story! 5stars

A sweet love story…well written and plotted, with engaging characters.

Absolutely awesome story! Thank you very much for sharing.

Excellent story I hope I get to meet my Kari someday. I know that I am ugly also and stories like this helps give me a bit of confidence

Warm and fragrant is what comes to mind. Cinnamon and oranges in front of the glowing embers of an old fire. Great story, reassuring that beauty is so much more than skin deep and that there are good people in the world who recognize it! Bravo.

Hi, l loved the story and the characters, unfortunately your time line destroyed the narrative. You begin with getting ready to disappear the scene and nowhere within the narrative do you bring them back together. This could have happened at the park when Coral makes his explanation but you must stitch this into the narrative to keep the timeline and the story make sense.

@arghjac I really don't agree. He says at the beginning of the story that he's on the way to break up with the love of his life. He then goes on to explain why. After talking to his friend Callum, he decides to break up with her and sets off. The reader finds themselves at the same point here as the beginning of the story, having been told why he came to that decision.

Seems obvious to me.

Perhaps you should read it again?

2 stars because Kari was a lying deceptive bitch

I loved it. A very sweet, short story. Full marks.

My only disappointment is that you do not have more stories I can read. 5.

Okay all of you who plan on getting married, this THIS RIGHT HERE IS HOW YOU SHOULD FEEL ABOUT YOUR PARTNER TOO BE, because even the most shallow, materialistic selfish, beautiful on the outside but needs to work on the inside parts knows that eventually LOOKS FADE and then what are you Left with? 🤔🤔🤔 understand?

I tried to dislike her, but you wrote her so well that I couldn't. So, 5 stars, for good quality writing, enjoyable story, GOOD characters (in all senses of the word) and happy end. Thank you.

Lovely.

You warm the cockles of our hearts.

Excellent !