All Comments on 'The Ponytail Express Ch. 05'

A very good addition, I'm looking forward to more of this story. Thank you!

Great story, keep it up!

Thanks for the speedy update ! I read your story at first to do stuff but got hooked and kept on reading and reading ! And when ch-4 ended I was wanted more , kept on checking and wanted more of the story like an addict to drugs ( yeah! It's a bit of an exaggeration but as I was once an addict I can say it confidentially ) ! Please do keep up your good work !

Love the story. Only one comment: MORE!!! Can't wait for the next few chapters.

Thanks for the encouragement folks! If you want more, then more you shall get. Currently at work on chapter 9.

Great stuff!

Interesting what he can all smell, and that he can impact guys too.

Loving the story so far, and hoping for more!

World-building question for you though... Since he can implant the desire to get a tattoo, effect memories, etc, would it be somewhat in line with the power to have the ability make Deb bi, or have attraction to one person for her to try it out?

Sorry if this is going to be covered next chapter with Mia.

Anon, keep reading. = )

This is a really awesome story. I am impressed with the way you mixed in some of the semi-recent scientific stuff regarding dogs being able to smell illness the same way they are able to tell when someone is about to have a seizure. You put lots of real life scientific data points but added them so easily and smoothly that it just seems Ike a logical possibility in his current situation. You have been rocking this story totally and the way you have Fred and Deb both dating and working together to see what he can do is another smart move considering his abilities and it also adds to the overall eroticism of the story. Thanks for the great story.

J.D.

I love how this story is building up. Right balance of control and self control!

I am really enjoying your writing. But I can tell it needs a lot of editing. I get confused here and there, but can assume what you intended to write. It will be a much better read after it goes through editing once or twice.

Deb with other men breaks with the norm for the harem genre. He’d no longer be special to her…

If he becomes a cuck and let's another man have his woman, I'm done...

He should never allow Deb to be with another man...

Wait, when did he implant that he wanted her to get a tattoo of him? I missed that.

What are these shameful hints about the kukold? It's terrible, just disgusting.

"First time making love, first time giving someone a real blowjob."

but she said she'd given some before.

very suprised deb's the virgin and fred isn't

"After the great reaction to the second blowjob she'd ever given, she had anticipated this conversation after they got back to her room. Deb wasn't completely sure she should have had sex with him so soon, but it was like she kept finding more things to like about him. ScSc or not, she had grossly misjudged him. He treated her better than any other guy ever had"

see, this is much better build up. Also again, she previously remembered giving head in the past.