All Comments on 'The Ponytail Express Ch. 08'

Loving this story

I am loving this story! I am glad you didn't have the bad guys get the upper hand and win, I hate that in a story. I would love to see Oni become pregnant after her exhausting first time with Fred. Plus I would like to see how that would change the dynamic with the other girls.

Oh, a very yummy addition to this story. I'm looking forward to more of this foursome! Thank you!

Great characters in a wild story. Still rockin it.

Awesome Story.

However, this piece could have needed a fair share of proof reading...

A really promising story that feels undercut by the effortlessness of it. Whatever Fred wants, Fred gets. His hesitancy in the early chapters gave room for some character and relationship development, and a story arc that promised some dramatic tension. This chapter was more "Fred snaps his fingers twice, all is resolved and we're on to foo-foo-fest."

All great stories have bumps along the way. Really good writers recover quickly from them. I have faith that that's the case here.

Great alternative. Instead of walking us through it, you sum it all up after works. Looking forwards to more.

However, proofreading was certainly lacking this chapter.

Love the story, but agree that everything is too easy for fred. Maybe if he loses control over himself and temporarily (?) turns the women into his slave girls.

would really like to see how the summer season works out?

Please tell me you are continuing this story?!

Yes.

Good story! If you choose to continue, I hope to see Fred (why did you choose that name?) help ease the truma that Niamh's gone through.