by MellowHaze
You're getting better at this. I'm looking forward to reading more of this story! You might want to add some depth to your characters, yes they had sex, but besides that, how did they feel while doing it... (not just the orgasm) Thank you!
I love CMNF. It's also so rare to find female public exposure that's more casual and something she enjoys, rather than something that makes her miserable. I also love how you prevent the mind control angle from getting too skeevy by working in her genuinely liking what she's made to do. You really put a lot of thought and care into this. <3