All Comments on 'The Promise'

I get the feeling your stories are from college days where you were graded not only on the content but also on your use of vocabulary. I read about half of the first page and got extremely bored. Then I looked back on the other stories you submitted, thinking that maybe it was just this story that was a homework assignment. NOPE. I get the feeling you may have written a sentence and then opened your thesaurus to "modify" the normal speech in some effort to impress us with your brilliance. I would ask you to remember who you are submitting this stuff to and tone it down accordingly. Otherwise I believe you are wasting your time here.

Possibly the most literate erotic piece of literature I've ever read. This one gets bookmarked for further enjoyment.

p.s. I liked the big words...

no goog wast of time to read it

Nitro70652: "I would ask you to remember who you are submitting this stuff to and tone it down accordingly."<br />

You know, if you can only handle a tiny vocabulary and repeated words until one is sick of the words, then I suggest you go and read puddle lane. Not everyone here likes the same old sentences used all the time.<br />

execuwriter: A wonderful job of presenting a story with all the necessary background and hold to convince me to read seven pages. Better still, you kept me guessing until the very end which way you were going to swing it. (yes, I know the world doesn't approve of writing snuff, and so the result was almost guaranteed to be nobody dies, but a story doesn't have to admit that until the end...) <br />

Well Done.

This is an excellent story, although it is marred a bit by occasional errors. A bigger issue is the fact that it seems to have two endings. I suspect that the author changed the ending, but somehow neglected to delete the original version of the ending.