All Comments on 'The Pulitzer'

That was awesome. I love your writings. It's not just sex you make it an actual story. Please keep it up and thank you:-)

Great story, @ShelbyDawn! Fun, exciting, emotional...a wild ride. One thing though...did "Susan" become "Sarah" partway through the story? :D

@Crios _ SMH. I think you're right.

Another day, another Shelby Dawn banger. 5 stars and a favourite as always.

As always a great pleasure reading one of your stories.

Love, Mimi

Absolutely amazing story. A tour de force.

Loved the story -- look forward to more new art from you!

Knocked it out of the park again! I have been enjoying reading your stories for years and I was honored when you stumbled onto mine. When I write I'm just fooling around. When I read yours I can appreciate how much time and effort you put into them!

Great story Shelby, action, adventure, villains, heroes, sex and romance. I can only give you 5 stars but it's worth 10!

Another great story!

An excellent story. I think with a bit more details and some fillers it could have a potential fo becoming a whole book. I would definitely buy it 😀 Keep up the good work. And can't wait for more of your stories.

You amaze me.thanks!

A treat to read, as always. Your story arrived with the last batch of snow, a fresh cup of hot chocolate /w marshmallows of course, one must be civilized, and lots of free time. Snowed in again, sigh, LOL.

The whole thing with Mike raping her really bothered me, but I liked the Toni character a good bit. Thank you!

As a late in life transwoman this story hit me in the feels so very much . Thank you for such an emotional, well written story. I will read this over and over again on days I beed to smile.

As a late in life transwoman I just wanted to say thank you for writing such an emotional and beautiful atory. I am certain i will read this again and again as I need a smile

I loved your story, well written and very entertaining. I have only one quibble (and it is a very minor one) - someone who enjoys photography that much isn't going to go for long without having at least some kind of camera, and Toni had the means from the moment Mike transferred the money to her account.

Weren’t her parents killed before she let fat town at the start? Then they show back up at the end???

@JessicaAlexander. No. the timing is a little spurious, but her dad and grandfather killed the mob guys. What Tony and Mike saw was the FBI illusion that they had been killed as they were taken into protective custody.. I could have done better there. Thank you.

That was probably the best story that I have read here on Literotica. I don't normally read long stories but this one captivated me. It also reminded me of my life growing up. Although not as interesting as this story. Congratulations on a well written story.

Synthia

Great stuff as always Shelby. Except even with your usual high quality this one stands out. Very well written, emotional, good twists and lots of hot butt action ;)

I really enjoyed it, it's great and you can stop here SVC know that that is the truth but if you care for some constructive criticism I've got some of that too.

One thing is how Mike coerced her into sex, lest I use an uglier term. Not that such things don't happen or have no place in (sex) stories. Nor is it impossible for someone get over such a thing as Toni did. Indeed she was always somewhat willing and it definitely ended on the note. The point I am trying to make is while such a story element can have its place in this story it was incongruous and unnecessary. It just leaves a stain on the otherwise wholesome siblings (with benefits ;) ) relationship and there is really no story reason or payoff to the forced sex.

Well except for the sex itself which neatly brings me to my second point, which I might have broadly mentioned in my past replies to your and other works. My thinking is, and it might be a bit crass and you could disagree, that stories like these serve in largest part to get people off. And the best way to achieve that is with hot sex scenes. But what makes a sex scene hot? Well generally I'd say there is good writing obviously, but also more specific things like being expressive, not using the same word over and over and making things generally repetitive (in and out, in and out you know? :P ) but the main one I stress is the length. A good long sex scene is more likely to be quality, because it just becomes torturous to write a long one that's bad and even weaker writers know this. So to give concrete advice and not make this an essay. I think it is best to compartmentalize when writing sex scenes. When you are developing plot you are developing plot, when it comes time for sex you focus on that and write a good long scene, each sex scene should be long interrupted by periods of plot building. Your main scenes in this story were almost prefect, they just needed a biiit more length. But it is the non-main ones that need work, because while it can be nice to allude to sexy times during the more narrative segments you end up in an awkward middle ground where those little sex scenes are long enough to get us going but leave us with another relatively long narrative segment before the next sexy bit. Which itself could be another shortie ;) So while it may feel more artificial to have long blocks of narrative interchange with long sex scenes instead of doing it seamlessly I do firmly believe the end result is more, ahem, erotic.

Anyway food for thought. Thanks for another great story and take care :)

PS. When you go for another vacation from your lovely redheads may I suggest a blue eyed brunette, those gals sure have wormed their way into my heart lately.

Thank you for the brilliant and well written story. I never guessed what would happen next and was totally involved at every step. Exciting but also a story of finding true love. 🤗 😘

Another great story, believable with a rollercoaster plot, it kept me engaged throughout. I have to admit the non consent sex early on seemed unnecessary and I didn't like it. Overall amazing, a journey of discovery and ultimate a happy ending (always a plus). You always make me laugh, and sometimes cry because the characters are "so real" both happy and sad tears. For those that are just here to get off on sex scenes, may be a small caveat at the beginning. I look forward to the next publication. Luv Chloe. x

I absolutely love your stories. I've been reading your stories for a long while now an figured I'd share my gratitude. The way you write your characters is always so engaging. I especially appreciate that you do your best to to write them in a respectful light. That and the up beat happy endings because who doesn't love a happy ending, especially lately. Thank you for writing such amazing stories and I hope you continue to do so.

One of my most favorite writings. Enjoyed it on so many levels. Thank you for sharing your gift!

Mike,an adult man in charge basically forces an underage person to have sex with him. Cringe worthy, illegal, and immoral. I think you should have written another way around this

As much as I enjoyed this story, I think you could have made it better by making the story two or three chapters. The transition from Little Angie to Toni was too quick. What was Mike up to? How did he get his legit/illegit money? How was Sarah able to “adopt’ Toni? How did Eric find Brian, or did Brian find Eric?

Good story but it feels like you left a lot on the table.

For reading such happy stories, it always amazes me that I'm crying my eyes out two or three times when reading your work. It's a compliment, and a testament to the emotions evoked by your ability. You are a gifted writer Shelby, and your skill continues to improve with each tale. While I am inspired by your work, I'm still at the fledgling author stage I think. Thanks for sharing your stories here. I love your work!

A excellent story like all your ather stories. I have red most off them 3 or more time's I love that your stories have happy endings. I must say for a 55 year old man that is bedridden because of cancer and a finger fult on Google search that brought me the first story from you I can't wait for you to post the next one. Please continue to biring joy to people's lives with happy endings

Amazing story, I loved it.

Marvelous. Ery well done.

Wow!! After some of your other stories I thought you couldn't do better. But you did!! If I had a profile I would definaltly favorite this one. samm4906

Wow !

What an emotional roller coaster. Every time i finish the next story of yours, ( 6 on the bounce throughout the night ) i have a new favourite, certainly favourite author.

This should be on the big screen, genuus xx