All Comments on 'The Queen's Slave'

You meant BUTTOCKS.

BARRED pussy lips? You meant BARE.

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I noted the previous comment and yes you could use a good editor. Nothing unusual there very few of us can write error free. I definately can't. Look I just misspelled definitely. That said I love your story and really hope you continue. For a first attempt it's awesome. And I look forward to the next chapter. Will she attempt to escape? Will she learn to submit? Please, please don't give up.

Please tell me there's more!

An excellent 1st attempt at writing. Do not worry about the English professors and spoilers who live to pick a work apart. It was a great first chapter. I hope you continue it. I think your story line has promise and look forward to where it can go.3X

Well that was a fun quick read. Hoping there's allot more to Cum! Thank you for it.

Do write more. It has potential.

I too hope there are many more chapters coming

Keep it up, hope there's a part two!

This was amazing! Please Write more?

I read this in response to your request for feedback on the Forum. I think you did a nice job on this first effort. The other comments seem to indicate the same. Congratulations, and I hope this is just the beginning of a fun adventure of writing.