by Pineapplelovers69
This was such a great story. It was well-written, funny, touching and romantic. You made me care about this couple, and I definitely want to see where you take them. A great first effort. Thank you for sharing.
Just love the romance and humour..Please keep writing
Don't worry about the so called literary critics..DO NOT CHANGE your style.!
For a first submission, this story was great! This sounds like a truly fun couple who knows how to enjoy themselves, both inside the tent and out. Excellent descriptions and a lot of humor. I identified with John with his nervousness about the signals he thought (wished?) he was getting from Jeanne, especially with him having 3 sexy young co-workers there with him urging him to try to bed this woman. Please, PL69, don't make us wait to find out what these sexy senior citizens do next!