All Comments on 'The Reality Engine Ch. 09'

Your chapters are getting better, you had me chuckling at times.

Also the suspense is great, it has me trying to figure things out..

more of a connection to the moose and squirrel than anyone suspects. Either you are one of the original writers, or you are related/connected somehow, because this tale is straight out of a 'Moose Show Mind.' LOL

Enjoying it, to no end. Thanks for sharing.

Oh, you might want to watch out for the correct usage of 'your' vs 'you're'.

'Your' is indicative of someone's possession of an object or a personal attribute. IE: 'Your lack of correct usage of your and you're is showing in your tale.'

'You're' is a contraction of 'you' and 'are'. Until you have conquered the mastery of the correct use of the two words, ask yourself the following question every time your write either 'your' or 'you're': Does the phrase/sentence make sense if I replace 'your'/'you're' with 'you are'?

Using the previous example, 'Does this make sense: You are lack of correct usage of...?

Now, ask the question about this sentence: 'You're going to learn how to correctly use 'your' and 'you're' in your writing, if you follow my advice.'

Hope this helps. The moose and squirrel will be pleased.

GeoD

This is so good . I'm so glad I ran across it . The plot is thickening and there are so many questions . You're doing yourself right by telling your tale while you're getting advice from your fans . Lol .

Love the story. BTW, it's dining NOT dinning.