All Comments on 'The Reconnection'

You should not capitalise so many words inside a sentence. No need for it.

Loved it. You could feel he sexual tension and release. I surely hope this has many more chapters~

I like the build up and simple present tense works for this narrative - wish there was more of it. You could try expanding the last two paragraphs, but that’s just my opinion. Also, was the mention of vanilla vs. “diverse” history a hint for more stories to come? (If it wasn’t, then you’re giving the reader false hope :)

Thank you for the constructive criticism. I have a lot of work to do I know. My 10th grade typing course (a hundred years ago and on a real typewriter) never broke me of the nasty habit of caps in middle, I will do my best in the future to fix that before publication. As for the future there are a few more parts to come with the adventures of Audrey and Fred as they explore new territory.