All Comments on 'The Revealing Distractions of Ursul'

What was this? I'm sure no one knows, not even the author!

I get it, she's going through the change and she forgot to change (into clothes).

So did she have two friends with names that started with O, Ophelia and Ofelia?

WTF

HUH??? No stars. Look up dumb in the dictionary, it says "SEE this Story. But don't say we didn't warn you."

The BEAR

Sorry, but this just didn't do it for me. Not even sure it qualifies as a story--maybe if you expanded of action at meeting or maybe she got pulled by a cop--almost anything might help. Also the proof reading seemed to be pretty bad--pretty sure you mixed up his/her usage.

Was there a point to this? I'm being nice with the 2 stars.

She left with a gentleman and arrived back home HOURS later....is this the loving wives part of the story? Sorry, probably I miss something. Or is the story that miss something. I think the second is true.

I agree wid Da Bear. First, the title is either too long to include Ursula's whole name, or it's a typo. Ouch! In the title. Then, the story itself is a head-scratcher. Is it a vignette, an excerpt, or a "lemme publish something because I haven't dropped anything in XXX days"? Too much exposition made the dialogue seem like an afterthought. The dialogue seemed to appear at regularly spaced intervals, so there was a sort of monotony to it. This is technically well-written, but there's not much to actually read. Stalin said that quantity was a quality of its own, but while that's true for T34-85s and Katyushas, it's not so much for writing. 2/5

I think thus is another failure for ChatGPT.

1*

Um yeah can't say much other than this is LW not incest. No ratings use the right category

"Darling, come up to see me in 15 minutes," he instructed her. """" Who said what to who???

This spine tingling thriller had me captivated from the beginning. A real who done it, with a nasty little twist. You have tore down the walls, of the three ark story structure. And shown us the way. Definitely 5☆.

⭐⭐ Huh? Was there any point to whatever this is?

The author, intoxicated with his vocabulary, lost sight of clarity and logical progression.

????? I'm sooooo confused!!!!!! Why LW ?

Dementia!

What was this? Nightmare? -⭐

Excess verbiage was distracting.

So she fucked the guy from the car wash? And she's married? Just too ridiculous. What was the point, women are too stupid to know they are naked and to be faithful to their marriage? I think you did an excellent job of illustrating stupidity.

I have to wonder if possibly your a MASH fan. If so do you recall the one where Radar was trying to improve his vocabulary? Please watch it and take heed!

Absolute rubbish!

A poor story, badly written. Per biography "A writer for 20 years" ? Not in English.