All Comments on 'The Rich Nerd and the Broke Blonde Pt. 02'

Loving the characters and i really hope they end up together. Only one piece of constrructive criticism, stick to either present or past participle. You tend to switch every other sentence and sometimes even mid sentence. Other than that, great job all around

There is definite potential here - really...

But, you should get someone to proof & edit before you post. There are lots of people who will edit for you free here on Literotica, or you can ask a friend...

The story is pretty good so far & I'm interested to see where it goes, but no authors (myself included) make very good editors of their own work.

Good Luck & Keep Writing

loving it

hope for more soon.

The girl should go out with him. It could actually make her experience love and respect... Great job so far!!

Would love to read how their story continues.

Any chance of more updates?