All Comments on 'The Room Pt. 01'

This story started off awkward - never been a fan of character vignettes at the start of the story, it seems lazy to me. Somehow this whole Cheerleader, Homecoming Queen, but borderline genius in maths demands a suspension of disbelief that I'm somehow unwilling to make at this point.

When the chat section started it got just uncomfortable and i stopped reading after four lines or so. It somehow felt racist and inappopriate - but as I'm not a native speaker that may be due to my own perception of it.

Please read a book or two and take notes on how to describe people and make their actions coherent with that description.