All Comments on 'The Runaway'

You had a good idea, but you were too fast on the draw. This would work for something like the old Penthouse Fourm section. But, the speed breaks the erotism barrier. In my humble opinion, you would have done better to have Beth sleep in one night at least before jumping into bed with them. Let her slip sowly into the greatful submissive sex-slave role. Take her to the club and have the 'twin' teach her a few things... Then BANG! all in all, I've given you a 4* rating.

Good luck and keep writing

Myhands316

too much too quickly reduced even potential erotic content.

if instead of a cute eighteen year old she'd been a runaway wifie of - oh let's say - twenty-seven?

Thanks for writing - 3*

You left us with a bit of a cliffhanger, please continue. :)

hope that there is a second chapter coming soon...

I agree with ythebadger and myhands316, too fast, sudden. Took away most of the eroticism…