All Comments on 'The Salon's Captive Ch. 02'

She loved the smell of dicks. This was life for Suzy Sleazy. BEST LINE EVER!

This is a fantastic story and I hope that it continues for a long time. But you do need a proofreader. There were numerous grammatical errors, as well as one section that did not seem to make sense to me....but that may have been due to my enjoyment!

It was great how Susan acquiesced to Nikki so readily. Susan's husband may need to be brought in so that he can be made to support the new lifestyles of his wife and daughters. Maybe he could be given a job as the Pimp to take off some of the load from Big Master. He should enthusiastically support their new direction in life.

Thank you for the feedback.

Sorry if there still a lot of grammatical error, I had put this one had been gone through two grammatical checks by editing software like Grammarly (well, only the free one), and Hemingway, and I went with how the grammar checking application suggested, but it seems that these aren't enough, I will strive to do better next time.

For the edited chapter 1(because somewhat the web didn't update it even after it passed 2 weeks, and I sent the admin few emails), please check my profile for some information.

well done...like the changes

It is one of my favorites!

When will the next part be out? It is a great story, please keep it up.