All Comments on 'The Selection Ch. 01'

You've got an interesting premise for a story, but I'm one of those readers easily distracted by grammatical errors. The two most distracting and frequently occuring types of errors seemed to be sentence fragments and redundancy, although the story would also quite benefit from being reread with an eye for missing words, or words that are spelled very like the word you want but which are not the word you actually wanted.

From what I can tell of the build up, this might be the kind of story I tend to look for, so I'll proceed to part 2, but if I were a less forgiving reader I would probably not have finished this first part--too many errors with not enough 'hook' to compensate and really lock my interest.

Stars not working... Four from me.

Good setup.