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A good start to a Potteresque story. A couple instances of ‘your’ that should be ‘you’re’, plus a bit of confusion between the ‘room of requirements’ and the ‘Kústurbolti storage room’ for their tryst. Also, there’s a mention of a ‘quaffle’ during the Kústurbolti game, which appears to be a HP hangover and also a mention of he ‘Drekabolti season’ without explanation. Also, maybe November should be ‘Gormánuður’, although the precise period is slightly different, i.e. early November would be mid-Gormánuður.

LL

@The_Licentious_Laureate thanks for the feedback, it started off set in the wizarding world, but had to change it. You are right there are numerous errors and plot problems throughout. Looking back at it I think it's pretty bad overall, I'll try and get it removed I think, sadly my ability at writing is terrible don't think I'll try again with it