All Comments on 'The Slave of the Harem'

poorly executed. Stories just don't sound right to me in the present tense. Also it's a bit clinical, and there's no background information. A man is led into a harem... why? Where did he come from? What does he look like? Why are the women there? A bit of knowledge about the characters helps make it seem more real, and, if done correctly, more erotic.

Keep writing though; I would be interested to see how your techniques develop.

This is my new favorite story on Literotica. Thanks.