All Comments on 'The Soldier and the Single Mom Ch. 01'

You have a nice beginning to this story. However, please get someone to edit it as the many grammatical errors keep the story from flowing smoothly and it really detracts from your work.

I think this is a nice beginning, but you need an editor!

This story itself has potential, but it needs to flow and right now it is not. You have tried to cram a lot on information into a short amount or writing. I look forward to the next chapter!

so please keep it coming

I think the idea is great, I loked what I read so far! keep it up and post next chapter soon! Well done.

I like the development, nice pace, good descriptions, good emotion. Could use a little technical editing such as punctuation, spelling etc.., otherwise sounds good.

I like the free flowing style, please continue.

Waiting for ch. 2!

where is the rest of the story?

Where's the romance? This could have been posted as non-erotic.

Story is good but needs more and an ending

Thi is not even beginning of a story