All Comments on 'The Squeeze Ch. 02'

Premise is excellent.

Story and writing ability are also excellent.

But the types of emotions this is evoking, the length must be more significant. The continuation will not have the strong effect this story deserves.

I can't say how much longer it needs to be, but your ability dictates that an actual chapter is necessary. This length, posted here, is little more than a synopsis. The questions raised and limited answers given, provide for much less than a tease.

To be a great story, it needs the substance you're obviously capable of writing. Can't favourite the story when so much is missing, and you're not doing it justice.

Sorry, but you're actually good enough to deserve this level of criticism, else I wouldn't have bothered.

Still, I'm very keen to see where you're taking this. But patience must be rewarded.

Bebop3 has posted "What I Wish I Knew"

Do yourself a favour and have a look. It's an excellent guide.

Fantastic! Whens the next one??

Where’s the rest of the story