All Comments on 'The Swedish Girl'

A very romantic and well written story on the universal language of love and sex. Looking forward to more stories.

Love the style you adopted here — flows nicely/poetically, captures so well the lust/love, sensuality you want to share. And the anonymity enhances the erotic scene. Not really a criticism rather personal preference: Not sure opening lines about English/Swedish language and her poor English necessary despite title and truth that love/lust doesn’t need speech. If her speaking English poorly is important why not start with last 3 lines of piece and move onto “Our flat. Our bedroom. Our bed.” Love the simplicity of that line as it focuses our attention so effortlessly. Love as well your username — Bluethroats are strikingly beautiful/colorful. And your reference to singing birds at the start and closing of your piece a nice touch. Pretty obvious that I like what you shared here; hope you continue.